Message-ID: <Pine.NEB.4.61.0410101336020.11864@panix3.panix.com>
From: Alan Sondheim <sondheim@panix.com>
To: Cyb <cybermind@listserv.aol.com>,
"WRYTING-L : Writing and Theory across Disciplines" <WRYTING-L@LISTSERV.UTORONTO.CA>
Subject: Proof
Date: Sun, 10 Oct 2004 13:36:11 -0400 (EDT)
Proof 'sneer' seems to have a space between s and n first line middle - the double arrow <--> doesn't read that way because of the type - can you use a symbol here? same on type line from bottom, every-thing change to everything can you change the italics of "in this sentence" to "_in this sentence_"? The underline would go better with the rest of the typography in this piece. line of type, please change "west" to "West" at the bottom of : "Am Ursprung gibts kein Plagiat" (Karl Kraus) - please if possible put this on the Dedication as well. maybe put "TERMI NAL" on a line by itself: TERMINAL from bottom - need parenthetical closure after "spatial" middle - you might want to use arrow symbols here as well very top of - since this is untitled, it seems a continuation of - maybe capitalize HONEY:> NOTHING WORKS IN THIS SPACE, - just that far, as indicative of a new piece. not sure but there seems a slight opening between lines and third line - please take out "(changed the name)" - it seems self-evident - rd paragraph, from third sentence - can we change to "Wild theory is pierced, penetrated. The piercings" - then include the rest of the paragraph. In other words, take out the ref. to grrrl theory. is a sonnet of lines plus . But here the justifying makes a bit of a mess of it. Perhaps you can run it sideways - some way to preserve the original lines? Smaller type? down about a third - change "oopback" to "loopback" - please note about / of the way down, where "Member name" and the next two lines are - they're misaligned, check the ms? Same near bottom where the ____media____ and the next line is - they should be on the same line - please check the syntax here? for example second line, you have _=-; it should be either _=_ or -=-. The whole needs checking. there's odd alignments of "Alan sings o/~" - I wonder if this can be rejustified? If not, it's ok - you might check the alignment of this with the original - it's a bit off. Will do, however -